» Up, Up, && Away » - - - A poem by Sam

Subject: » Up, Up, && Away » - - - A poem by Sam Sun Aug 30, 2009 6:31 pm

here it is guys::
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You take two steps up the stairs,
Then three steps back,
You turn yourself to the left,
And take the elevator.
The button going towards the roof is already pressed,
On the bottom floor,
The roof is 20 floors away.
You stay inside on your long journey.
You don't stop at any other floors.

Second floor...
Third floor...
Fourth floor...

The elevator stops at the fifth floor,
The button was pressed but nobody was there.
You think to yourself,

---'Where are my friends?
Where are my Acquaintances?
Where are my dearly beloveds?'---

You continue your journey,

Sixth floor...
Seventh floor...
Eighth floor...

The elevator door opens once more,
A child, an innocent child, with nothing to do,
Has pressed the elevator button, not knowing what it does.
The door closes and you continue your journey,

Tenth floor...
Eleventh floor...
Twelfth floor...
Thirteenth floor...
Fourteenth floor...

You expected the door to open soon enough,
Nothing happens, as if time had stopped during your journey.

Fifteenth floor...
Sixteenth floor...
Seventeenth floor...
Eighteenth floor...

The door opens once more,
The floor right below your destination.
All your friends,
All your acquaintances,
All your dearly beloveds,
There, in front of you,
You step out of the elevator,
Knowing that there is only one flight of stairs left,
You and your friends,
Take the last flight of stairs,
Knowing that you would make it.

You begin to get tired,
You want to give up.
A frown begins to form on your face.

---"What's wrong?"---

---"I..-"---

You look around at your friends,
Their smiling faces,
You begin to smile,
Not only with your mouth,
Not with your eyes either,
You smile with your heart,

--"I'm just happy we're having a great time."--

The happy looks,
The good times,
You're encouraged to go on.

You make it to the roof,
Finally, you have reached your destination.
Would you have gotten there,
Without Courage,
Without Strength,
Without Confidence,
Without Faith,
Without Friendship?

You're on the roof,
With all your friends,
All your acquaintances,
All your dearly beloveds,

You look at your parachutes,
Then thought about it.
You and your friends acknowledge that you don't need parachutes.
You realize that what will keep you from falling is Your Courage,
Your Strength,
Your Confidence,
Your Faith,
Your Friendship.

You nod at your friends,
They nod back,
You all jump off the building,
You close your eyes,
You feel the cool breeze,
The wind going against your face,
You put your feet out,
Your friends do the same,
You all land on your feet,
Light as a feather.

You take a look at your friends,
Their surprised looks,
Their anxious faces,
The nervous smiles,
You all shout together,

--"Let's do that again!"--

please note i do accept criticism with all my creations.
i encourage all to give suggestions if needed.
~sam

Subject: Re: » Up, Up, && Away » - - - A poem by Sam Sun Aug 30, 2009 6:34 pm

Great job! I really like it Smile

Subject: Re: » Up, Up, && Away » - - - A poem by Sam Sun Aug 30, 2009 8:08 pm

Woah, that was really good!
I love to write so maybe I will post some of my writings here Very Happy

Subject: Re: » Up, Up, && Away » - - - A poem by Sam Mon Aug 31, 2009 7:24 pm

Thank you guys for the comments. Smile

Subject: Re: » Up, Up, && Away » - - - A poem by Sam Wed Sep 09, 2009 12:41 pm

That is a great poem, i think you should write more Smile